Last spring, I witnessed several Slicers attempt Golden Shovel poems. I wanted to try but kept putting it off. The link with “Find a Headline, Write a Poem” kept getting snoozed in my inbox. But today, as I designated 45 minutes to clean out my e-mail inbox, I decided to stop snoozing and try my own Golden Shovel poem.
I perused The Washington Post‘s main page for inspiration. I clicked on a piece that said MAY THE BEST GEAR WIN, which is about the gear Olympians are sporting at the Beijing Olympics. While I later (i.e., *After* I finished toiling over my Golden Shovel poem!) realized that may the best gear win was part of the article’s subtitle, not the main title, I decided to go with it anyway. Using “Top Gear: The Winter Olympics are tests not only of athletic achievement but of design and engineering. May the best gear win.” by Dave Sheinin as inspiration, here’s my Golden Shovel poem (bookended by videos so it makes sense in context):
MAY THE BEST GEAR WIN
Ari may
Have thought he knew the
How to make coins twist and spin. BUT, years ago, I found the best
Placement on the track to make the coins dance, hit the gear,
And fall to the bottom — so children, who need care, win.
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I am a literacy consultant who focuses on writing workshop. I've been working with K-6 teachers and students since 2009. Prior to that, I was a fourth and fifth-grade teacher in New York City and Rhode Island.
I'm the author of Craft Moves (Stenhouse Publishers, 2016) and the co-author of Jump Into Writing (Zaner-Bloser, 2021), Welcome to Writing Workshop (Stenhouse Publishers, 2019), and Day By Day (Stenhouse, 2010).
I live in Central Pennsylvania with my husband and children. In my free time, I enjoy swimming, doing Pilates, cooking, baking, making ice cream, and reading novels.
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11 thoughts on “My First Attempt at a Golden Shovel Poem”
I echo your words, “Very cool!” One of the greatest things about our writing community is getting ideas to stretch ourselves as writers over and over again. Then, feel the support from the community to try out things, knowing that encouraging words will drop into our comments just the way we want to create community of writers with students.
I love the bookended videos here and your striking line! Everyone wins! The coins and wonder about the physics in this self discovery play is a perfect slice – just one moment, one incredible moment of a day that makes a difference. You encouraging your child, Ari figuring things out through a fun form of play, and children who will benefit from this one incredible moment of this day.
I couldn’t believe I found a slice in that moment, but I was happy I did. (Of course, I complicated it with the golden shovel, but that’s another story.)
Fun! I spent the whole of April writing golden shovel poems … that was quite the challenge! You chose a good line — not too long, a couple of really interesting words to move the poem forward. Great first go at this curious form!
I echo your words, “Very cool!” One of the greatest things about our writing community is getting ideas to stretch ourselves as writers over and over again. Then, feel the support from the community to try out things, knowing that encouraging words will drop into our comments just the way we want to create community of writers with students.
I love it when I get to play with new forms after being inspired by others!
I love the bookended videos here and your striking line! Everyone wins! The coins and wonder about the physics in this self discovery play is a perfect slice – just one moment, one incredible moment of a day that makes a difference. You encouraging your child, Ari figuring things out through a fun form of play, and children who will benefit from this one incredible moment of this day.
I couldn’t believe I found a slice in that moment, but I was happy I did. (Of course, I complicated it with the golden shovel, but that’s another story.)
Take a chance,
coin dancer,
and go on, now,
go on:
dance
🙂
Kevin
You always amaze me with your ability to spin new poems from slices, Kevin. That’s a true talent!
Ack, I LOVE this- we are trying golden shovels tomorrow and this post is s full of process and inspiration I cannot wait to share it!
LMK how it goes! I’d love to try this with Isabelle, but worry about frustrating her since I know how hard it was for me.
I’d never heard of the Golden Shovel poem! Thanks for the inspiration to try this out.
Fun! I spent the whole of April writing golden shovel poems … that was quite the challenge! You chose a good line — not too long, a couple of really interesting words to move the poem forward. Great first go at this curious form!
I love it! And thanks for the inspiration, both in content and presentation!!